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Series: Yami no Matsuei
Title: Flowers for Hisoka
Author: Child of Magick
Genre: General/Romance?
Rating: It's rated G, but I think it's at least PG-13, mainly due to slash.
Warnings: Badly done fluff. @_@;; Look out for a woman who gets in the way of Hisoka's 'tru luv' and of course, he gets jealous!
Couple (if applicable): Tsuzuki/Hisoka
Plot: - 5/10 Overdone, really. The title really says it all. There's some plot, Hisoka misunderstands something, but it all comes out nice and fluffy in the end!
It's boring, and parts don't make sense. Apparently, the OC, Quinn, was in love with Tsuzuki, but he ran off with an 'Evil Witch' and became a low class warlock. Gah?
Honestly, the story would've been better off without Quinn. It just seems like an odd fantasy reference throw in the story, with really no point.
It's also overdone. Somehow, Hisoka gets jealous but hides it. In the end, it's a misunderstanding and Hisoka flies into Tsuzuki's arms. Literally, in this story.
Writing: 7/10 - Well, the writing isn't bad. But it has it's share of errors. I'm not even 100% sure that I inteperted the entire 'Witch/Warlock' thing correctly, because the sentence itself doesn't make too much sense.
Characterization: 4/10 - Hisoka suffers a lot of OOCness in here. Let's see... Tsuzuki gives Hisoka a sappy love confession, Hisoka gives his own, with tears in his eyes... He gets jealous over another girl and misunderstands a situation...
I think we have fanon cliches numbered down here!
Negativities: Um, OOCness, and a pointless OC
Summary: We start off with Hisoka getting a note from Tsuzuki. Cue flashback of a VERY sappy love confession. As![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
wolfpilot06 told me over AIM, Hisoka would NOT fly into Tsuzuki's arms, tears streaming down his face, admitting that he loved him.
*Gags* After, Hisoka starts to doubt Tsuzuki's words. Let me tell you, an important thing in a relationship is trust, and I think Hisoka would trust his partner, especially if Tsuzuki told him he loved him.
Then we get introduced to Quinn, a young witch who's been friend's with Tsuzuki for a long time. Apparently, she helped them out with a fight and was injured and in the hospital.
On Hisoka's way to visit her, he notices Tsuzuki buying flowers, his favorite kind. Of course, he thinks Tsuzuki is buying these flowers for Quinn. Cue Hisoka angst.
In the end, you find out that Tsuzuki bought the flowers for Hisoka and not for Quinn.
So, overall, Quinn serves no purpose in this story, only to cause angst. Overdone angst. :(
Overall - 5.3/10 - It's not the worst story I've come across in the fandom. But it could use some improvements. It's not something I would recommend unless you're desperate for fluff. I'll give brownie points for the writer to incooperate some fantasy theme into the story, but that's it.
Series: Yami no Matsuei
Title: Flowers for Hisoka
Author: Child of Magick
Genre: General/Romance?
Rating: It's rated G, but I think it's at least PG-13, mainly due to slash.
Warnings: Badly done fluff. @_@;; Look out for a woman who gets in the way of Hisoka's 'tru luv' and of course, he gets jealous!
Couple (if applicable): Tsuzuki/Hisoka
Plot: - 5/10 Overdone, really. The title really says it all. There's some plot, Hisoka misunderstands something, but it all comes out nice and fluffy in the end!
It's boring, and parts don't make sense. Apparently, the OC, Quinn, was in love with Tsuzuki, but he ran off with an 'Evil Witch' and became a low class warlock. Gah?
Honestly, the story would've been better off without Quinn. It just seems like an odd fantasy reference throw in the story, with really no point.
It's also overdone. Somehow, Hisoka gets jealous but hides it. In the end, it's a misunderstanding and Hisoka flies into Tsuzuki's arms. Literally, in this story.
Writing: 7/10 - Well, the writing isn't bad. But it has it's share of errors. I'm not even 100% sure that I inteperted the entire 'Witch/Warlock' thing correctly, because the sentence itself doesn't make too much sense.
Characterization: 4/10 - Hisoka suffers a lot of OOCness in here. Let's see... Tsuzuki gives Hisoka a sappy love confession, Hisoka gives his own, with tears in his eyes... He gets jealous over another girl and misunderstands a situation...
I think we have fanon cliches numbered down here!
Negativities: Um, OOCness, and a pointless OC
Summary: We start off with Hisoka getting a note from Tsuzuki. Cue flashback of a VERY sappy love confession. As
wolfpilot06 told me over AIM, Hisoka would NOT fly into Tsuzuki's arms, tears streaming down his face, admitting that he loved him.*Gags* After, Hisoka starts to doubt Tsuzuki's words. Let me tell you, an important thing in a relationship is trust, and I think Hisoka would trust his partner, especially if Tsuzuki told him he loved him.
Then we get introduced to Quinn, a young witch who's been friend's with Tsuzuki for a long time. Apparently, she helped them out with a fight and was injured and in the hospital.
On Hisoka's way to visit her, he notices Tsuzuki buying flowers, his favorite kind. Of course, he thinks Tsuzuki is buying these flowers for Quinn. Cue Hisoka angst.
In the end, you find out that Tsuzuki bought the flowers for Hisoka and not for Quinn.
So, overall, Quinn serves no purpose in this story, only to cause angst. Overdone angst. :(
Overall - 5.3/10 - It's not the worst story I've come across in the fandom. But it could use some improvements. It's not something I would recommend unless you're desperate for fluff. I'll give brownie points for the writer to incooperate some fantasy theme into the story, but that's it.
