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Yami no Matsuei fanfic review
Jun. 19th, 2003 06:32 amSeries: Yami no Matsuei
Title: Green Eyed Soul
Author: sayaa
Genre: Drama/Romance
Rating: PG so far?
Warnings: None that I know of?
Couple (if applicable): None yet, but mild hints of Tsuzuki + Hisoka
Plot: 9/10 - This is a fairly interesting story. And I'm SHOCKED that this person has NOT made their OC a Mary Sue. She talks to Hisoka a LOT, but the way they interact amazes me. The case plot is fairly well thought out and believable.
Writing: 7/10 - And this girl says her native language isn't english. :X Actually, there's a few errors here and there in her fic that I've noticed, but it's FAR from some of the errors I've seen run rampent in other fics. The flow of the story is good and it's well written over all. She might want to get a beta reader though so they can point them out to her.
Characterization: 8/10 - There's a LITTLE OOCness in her fic, but not to the point where it would make you cringe in terror. Hisoka is a bit too sarcastic to me and a bit mellowed out, but then again, if she's writing about the anime, it's fine, as Hisoka seemed pretty mellow in the anime than in the manga.
Negativities: Just a few errors, but other than that, nothing outragious.
Summary: It's a case fic. Tsuzuki and Hisoka go undercover to investigate. But it seems the case is a bit more complicated than it looks. Because it's not finished, I can't give you all a full blown out summary.
Overall - 8/10 - The fic has a few errors, but they're minimal. It's worth a read. The only thing that bugs me is her reaction at the end of her recent chapter. You should write because you WANT to write, not because you don't have a shit load of reviews.
Title: Green Eyed Soul
Author: sayaa
Genre: Drama/Romance
Rating: PG so far?
Warnings: None that I know of?
Couple (if applicable): None yet, but mild hints of Tsuzuki + Hisoka
Plot: 9/10 - This is a fairly interesting story. And I'm SHOCKED that this person has NOT made their OC a Mary Sue. She talks to Hisoka a LOT, but the way they interact amazes me. The case plot is fairly well thought out and believable.
Writing: 7/10 - And this girl says her native language isn't english. :X Actually, there's a few errors here and there in her fic that I've noticed, but it's FAR from some of the errors I've seen run rampent in other fics. The flow of the story is good and it's well written over all. She might want to get a beta reader though so they can point them out to her.
Characterization: 8/10 - There's a LITTLE OOCness in her fic, but not to the point where it would make you cringe in terror. Hisoka is a bit too sarcastic to me and a bit mellowed out, but then again, if she's writing about the anime, it's fine, as Hisoka seemed pretty mellow in the anime than in the manga.
Negativities: Just a few errors, but other than that, nothing outragious.
Summary: It's a case fic. Tsuzuki and Hisoka go undercover to investigate. But it seems the case is a bit more complicated than it looks. Because it's not finished, I can't give you all a full blown out summary.
Overall - 8/10 - The fic has a few errors, but they're minimal. It's worth a read. The only thing that bugs me is her reaction at the end of her recent chapter. You should write because you WANT to write, not because you don't have a shit load of reviews.
