Fanfiction review, be warned. >.>

Series: Final Fantasy 6

Title: How Love Works

Author: Yasha Clstmk213

Genre: Drama/Action/Adventure/Romance

Rating: G

Warnings: None

Couple (if applicable): Locke and OC

Plot: 1/10 - Er, Christine, the OC, gets kidnapped and Lock (She uses the japanese names) has to save her. Simple and to the point, right? Is there a point to this story... Well no. Who is Christine? She just randomly appears, we have no background info on her either. Where's Celes too? The fandom couple tends to be either Locke/Terra or Locke/Celes. @_@ Who is this Kuja the Terra, how did he end up in here? Who's Garnet!? From FF9? Who's Abigail??? Too many questions that the author doesn't go into... She expects us, the readers, to think of the backstory for her.

BIG no no. We expect the author to give us the beef of the story, not let the readers do it for them. ~_~ The reason why this doesn't get a 0 is because it has SOME sort of point, just not much of a point. It has bare bone minimum.

Writing: 1/10 - Okay, the writing is like... a 7-8 year's old. It's too simple, there's not enough description, period. I didn't give it a 0, because I've seen WORSE. The story isn't formatted right, it's confusing, spelling and grammar are off, there's a Mary Sue, she adds in random references to FF9 (Like Kuja randomly ends up in this story), Celes is absent in this story... Geez, about everything you want wrong in a FF6 fic...

It doesn't get a 0 because it IS readable, but that's about it.

Characterization: 0/10 - None of the characters in this story are in character, of what I KNOW of. Locke just has this random girlfriend that there's absolutely NO background info on. I can't even tell who's WHO. I know Mash is Sabin and all, but... I can't regonize anyone. Period.

It gets a 0 because the characters I DO regonize are OOC. Why would Locke get involved with some strange girl?? Even if you ignore Celes and Terra, the author forgets cannon couple of Locke/Racheal and we all know how crazy he got over her death. ~_~;;; He wouldn't get into a relationship so easily.

Negativities: Um, see above. You could slap other names on this story and not know the difference. You honestly could. Actually, if you don't know the japanese names and feign ingorance on mogs, you couldn't tell this was a FF story.

Summary: Like I said, Locke finds his girlfriend got kidnapped and goes off to rescue her. It's as simple as you can get, the writing is VERY simple too. Easy to read but it looks like a pre-schooler wrote this. ~_~ And it's BAD, not because of the writing, but the overall confusing plot and such.

Overall - .6/10 - Just stay away from this fic. The author claims that she 'gave us imagination' when I told her she needs to go into more detail. She said she added in more description than from the 'original', so I don't even WANT to know what the original looks like. When I said use the english names, she basically blows me off.

I hope she takes the advice I gave her and the other one who reviewed. Btw, she doesn't take annoymous because 'they are too lazy to sign up, I don't want "lazy people" to read the story I wrote that took long time to do it. (I didn't mean that they are really lazy people though) That's why I only accept signed reviews.' Contradicting herself. How does she expect to get reviews then if she won't take all reviews????

This story needs a overhaul and a beta reader desperately. ~_~;;;

Another fanfic...

But VERY good news with this one. :D

Series: Yami no Matsuei

Title: Comfort Comes

Author: katsue_fox

Genre: PwP lemon, Romance, sap, bit of angst

Rating: NC-17, come ON, it's a lemon

Warnings: Graphic sex, male/male pairing

Couple (if applicable): Tsuzuki/Hisoka

Plot: NA - There's no plot to it. :P She even says it's PwP. >.> So can't score here.

Writing: 10/10 - I cannot find a single error in this fic. The writing is just really beautiful. Katsue mixes in some angst with the sappiness of the couple and she goes into detail.

I've seen some BAD lemons. Lemons that have 'crude' language in it, to the point where it seems like two guys are just 'fucking' each other. And yes, I've seen this in Tsuzuki/Hisoka's case too (Anyone watching the anime/read the manga would know their relationship is deeper than physical attraction. >.>)

However, Katsue's is FAR from that. The wording and the overall mood of the fic fits perfectly. The flow of the writing is perfect and there's no leaps and jumps as in some fics do. She builds up the sex scene fairly well and I'm SHOCKED that this is her first lemon. @_@ It doesn't seem like this is her first lemon. I hope this isn't her last. :P

Characterization: 10/10 - I can safely say that Tsuzuki and Hisoka are totally both in character and I can see them reacting this way after a time (The author says that this takes place long after the manga and anime, so given in time, I can see Hisoka slowly opening up to Tsuzuki after Kyoto).

Maybe I'm biased here, but I can see Hisoka doing the emotional comforting, and Tsuzuki intiating the physical aspect of the relationship. And this is exactly what Katsue did, Hisoka comforting Tsuzuki, being the main emotional support, and Tsuzuki intiates the physical relationship, being the one to take the 'next step', scared, but determined. :P And she does a very good job here.

Negativities: None that I can see. >.> I can't say anything bad about this.

Summary: It's a lemon, duh! Hisoka tries to comfort Tsuzuki after a difficult case, sex ensures. :P That's it. @_@;;

Overall - 10/10 - It has no plot, but come on! If you're a Tsuzuki/Hisoka sucker, this is a fanfic I would HIGHLY recommend anyone to read. The overall feeling and the way this fic is written is something that should not be skipped over. If you're old enough to handle this and don't squirm at the mention of male/male sex, then what are you doing still reading this review!?