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starzafandomblogOh, I have been waiting for some just wretched fanfic writing from this fandom and I FINALLY found one. The thing is? I don't know if this story is supposed to be taken seriously or if it's purposely written to BE a bad fanfic. I mean, it has ALL the classic signs of a bad fanfic. But for the first time, I can't tell 'if srs'. The thing is, if you go into this fic with the mind set of a bad fanfic, you actually may get entertainment out of it. But if you go into it expecting something remotely decent... Yeah...
Also, look at those warnings...
Series: Persona 5
Title: It Needs Work
Author: Freckledbun
Genre: Angst/fucked up ness up the ass
Rating: E
Warning: OOCness, random typos, stalker becoming the stalkee, rape, Incest, NCS, Psychological issues (Both these boys need to be put in a mental hospital, STAT!), self harm... Seriously, READ the author warnings, cause I don't want to type them all out, but if you have any triggers, beware
Couple (if applicable): Akechi/Akira mostly
Plot: 3/10 - I mean, what can I say about it? Basically, Akira starts out as a creeper with massive issues. I mean, he basically creates his own image of Akechi before he even mets him (later referred to as Fakechi in the story), and gets his 'inspiration' from him for his fanfics that he writes of him as Joker and Akechi. Like that's really laughable and ironic to this fic. Oh, also, while Morgana is real, he pretends that the cat can talk. And is also a slut, sleeping with just about everyone. It's like a really warped version of Persona 5. SIGH...
Meanwhile, we have the real Akechi, who apparently starts stalking Akira. Somehow they end up in a relationship. Later on, Akira walks into Akechi's apartment and finds him killing someone and... it just descends from there. Like, there's a really good reason the author put in those warnings.
So yeah, part of the story has Akira locked in a box for some time and it's just... not good. Also, remember that scene I was flipping out about in TnC, aka Screwdriver scene? Well, this story has something very simular, only it's a gun this time. I burst out laughing and then wanted to cry cause I was having TnC flashbacks while reading that part.
So you think with what I said above that this fic couldn't get any worse? Oh yeah it does. It goes into whacko land in it's second arc where Shido shows up, kidnaps Akira and basically makes him into a sex slave. Again, be mindful of the warnings, cause it's really bad in that chapter and the following one as well.
After the horror show of that, we get to the first sensible thing that anyone ever says in this trash, Akechi tells Akira to go get help and stay away from him. But you think anyone in this fic follows common sense? NAH!
There's one more batshit insane scene where basically Akechi buries Akira alive to 'surpress his murder overtones'. Like holy shit, I just... am lost for words, the fact that someone goes THAT far, but that someone even LETS them do that to themselves... BOTH these two need to be locked away in a mental hospital, ASAP.
I'll have to say, the ending is sort of clever, but in the context of this story? It's wasted and it doesn't make a lot of sense (I was kind of expecting 'Joker' to kill off Akechi when I saw the twist, but it's just more buttsex. SIGH!). So it's all a bad ending that does link to canon, even though at the very beginning, it was basically a 'no powers' type of story? With zero indication of it??? Yeah... Totally wasted.
Writing 3/10 - You know what's fucked up? This author CAN write some good shit. House of Wolves, while mostly drabbles, had a REALLY good concept and was written fairly well. This fic? Seems like the author typed it up and threw it up on Ao3 without rereading it or letting someone read it for them. There's a lot of typos that a simple spell checker would pick up along with grammar errors. I noticed a lot of periods in between words, and a spell checker WILL pick that crap up. Along with the same typos and misuse of same sounding words (two and too for example) and I saw AKira (Yeah, the first TWO letters capitalized) and several other words like that, where the first two letters are in caps when they shouldn't be.
Also, the writing itself can be really bland at times. The descriptions are bones bare as well. Let's not even get into the characterizations, or I should say 'what characterizations?' here. ~_~''
Characterization 1/10 - Yeah, this barely qualifies as a Persona 5 fanfic. Most of the characters, thank god, don't show up, but when they do, they're pretty much OOC. I mean, what bad fanfic would be complete without character bastardization?
I mean, again I ask, WHY write fanfiction featuring characters from something when a reader can barely tell it's from that fandom? JUST write freaking original fiction at that point, you could get paid for it, at the very least. 'Oh, it's just fanfiction'. No, that excuse doesn't fly, it NEVER flew with me, ever. When I read fanfiction, I want to read about the characters that I liked from the canon, why in the holy mother of fuck would I want to read a fanfic with no semblence to what it's originally from??? It's like taking Dragon Quest and slapping Final Fantasy over the name, but changing the proper nouns to more Final Fantasy sounding names.
Negatives: Low quality writing, insane plot, OOCness, lots and lots of squick moments
Summary: Akira develops aunhealthy obsession crush on the Dectective Prince that he's seen all of one time. It's all downhill from there...
Overall: 2.3/10 - Pretty much bottom tier fanfiction material. HOWEVER, if you go into this story expecting bad fanfiction, you'll probably get a kick out of it. And if the author kept that tone throughout the story, then I'd actually recommend reading it because it's one of those 'so bad, it's good!' things. But that tone doesn't stay, and just goes downhill very fast. In the end, I'd say stay clear of this one, moreso with all those warnings on there.
Also, look at those warnings...
Series: Persona 5
Title: It Needs Work
Author: Freckledbun
Genre: Angst/fucked up ness up the ass
Rating: E
Warning: OOCness, random typos, stalker becoming the stalkee, rape, Incest, NCS, Psychological issues (Both these boys need to be put in a mental hospital, STAT!), self harm... Seriously, READ the author warnings, cause I don't want to type them all out, but if you have any triggers, beware
Couple (if applicable): Akechi/Akira mostly
Plot: 3/10 - I mean, what can I say about it? Basically, Akira starts out as a creeper with massive issues. I mean, he basically creates his own image of Akechi before he even mets him (later referred to as Fakechi in the story), and gets his 'inspiration' from him for his fanfics that he writes of him as Joker and Akechi. Like that's really laughable and ironic to this fic. Oh, also, while Morgana is real, he pretends that the cat can talk. And is also a slut, sleeping with just about everyone. It's like a really warped version of Persona 5. SIGH...
Meanwhile, we have the real Akechi, who apparently starts stalking Akira. Somehow they end up in a relationship. Later on, Akira walks into Akechi's apartment and finds him killing someone and... it just descends from there. Like, there's a really good reason the author put in those warnings.
So yeah, part of the story has Akira locked in a box for some time and it's just... not good. Also, remember that scene I was flipping out about in TnC, aka Screwdriver scene? Well, this story has something very simular, only it's a gun this time. I burst out laughing and then wanted to cry cause I was having TnC flashbacks while reading that part.
So you think with what I said above that this fic couldn't get any worse? Oh yeah it does. It goes into whacko land in it's second arc where Shido shows up, kidnaps Akira and basically makes him into a sex slave. Again, be mindful of the warnings, cause it's really bad in that chapter and the following one as well.
After the horror show of that, we get to the first sensible thing that anyone ever says in this trash, Akechi tells Akira to go get help and stay away from him. But you think anyone in this fic follows common sense? NAH!
There's one more batshit insane scene where basically Akechi buries Akira alive to 'surpress his murder overtones'. Like holy shit, I just... am lost for words, the fact that someone goes THAT far, but that someone even LETS them do that to themselves... BOTH these two need to be locked away in a mental hospital, ASAP.
I'll have to say, the ending is sort of clever, but in the context of this story? It's wasted and it doesn't make a lot of sense (I was kind of expecting 'Joker' to kill off Akechi when I saw the twist, but it's just more buttsex. SIGH!). So it's all a bad ending that does link to canon, even though at the very beginning, it was basically a 'no powers' type of story? With zero indication of it??? Yeah... Totally wasted.
Writing 3/10 - You know what's fucked up? This author CAN write some good shit. House of Wolves, while mostly drabbles, had a REALLY good concept and was written fairly well. This fic? Seems like the author typed it up and threw it up on Ao3 without rereading it or letting someone read it for them. There's a lot of typos that a simple spell checker would pick up along with grammar errors. I noticed a lot of periods in between words, and a spell checker WILL pick that crap up. Along with the same typos and misuse of same sounding words (two and too for example) and I saw AKira (Yeah, the first TWO letters capitalized) and several other words like that, where the first two letters are in caps when they shouldn't be.
Also, the writing itself can be really bland at times. The descriptions are bones bare as well. Let's not even get into the characterizations, or I should say 'what characterizations?' here. ~_~''
Characterization 1/10 - Yeah, this barely qualifies as a Persona 5 fanfic. Most of the characters, thank god, don't show up, but when they do, they're pretty much OOC. I mean, what bad fanfic would be complete without character bastardization?
I mean, again I ask, WHY write fanfiction featuring characters from something when a reader can barely tell it's from that fandom? JUST write freaking original fiction at that point, you could get paid for it, at the very least. 'Oh, it's just fanfiction'. No, that excuse doesn't fly, it NEVER flew with me, ever. When I read fanfiction, I want to read about the characters that I liked from the canon, why in the holy mother of fuck would I want to read a fanfic with no semblence to what it's originally from??? It's like taking Dragon Quest and slapping Final Fantasy over the name, but changing the proper nouns to more Final Fantasy sounding names.
Negatives: Low quality writing, insane plot, OOCness, lots and lots of squick moments
Summary: Akira develops a
Overall: 2.3/10 - Pretty much bottom tier fanfiction material. HOWEVER, if you go into this story expecting bad fanfiction, you'll probably get a kick out of it. And if the author kept that tone throughout the story, then I'd actually recommend reading it because it's one of those 'so bad, it's good!' things. But that tone doesn't stay, and just goes downhill very fast. In the end, I'd say stay clear of this one, moreso with all those warnings on there.
